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    dots Submission Name: Red Rose Passiondots

    Author: totojane03
    ASL Info:    25- colorado springs
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 151/77/35
    Words: 289
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
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       deep passion, lust...for his love.

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    dotsRed Rose Passiondots

    A daydream a woke me late last night,
    I was in a fairy tale,
    Dressed with fastion,
    You were there to dressed,
    With passion,
    Looking a glow I saw a red rose,
    Nothing special,
    But it caught my eye,
    It brought me in to a wonderland,
    Where true love always with stands,
    The test of time was before me,
    The hour glass sand disappearing,
    there was no escape,
    Not that I would of wanted to,
    I felt your warmth,
    I felt your smile,
    I felt your touch,
    It all seemed so real.
    The red rose represented passion,
    And lust,Yellow was for freindship,
    And pink was for trust,
    We dance in the stars light,
    Under the Univerce,
    We were floating in the clouds,
    With out any fear or doughts,
    It was purfected passion,
    As we lay together saying our vows,
    To thine selfs be true,
    Forever and always,
    I shall love and cherrish you,
    I shall always be by your side,
    Please belive me when I say,
    I want you to always be mine,
    Oh- the red rose of passion,
    It speaks to me,
    It talks to my heart,
    I feels its beat match with mine,
    I feel its thrones,
    So sharpe and fine,
    Its dark red color makes me lust,
    Yes I lust of thrist,
    To taste that red rose of passion,
    to feel its warmth inside me,
    And set me free expect from him,
    I long to hold to touch,
    to Feel these very emotions,
    Touch me, I beg of thou,
    Let me feel that red rose passion,
    the heat, the warmth,
    Without thou I can not move on,
    Take my word and my vow,
    Oh red rose, Hold them dear,
    Dont ever let me go.

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    ||| Comments |||
      I agree with Bobby K... when you write from the heart it doesn't matter if you have spelled the right or not. Whenever you can write from your heart take the chance to. In addition to that when it seems that you want his love to the point that you will do anything to get it. You can't give up because if its meant to be it will all work out just have faith.
    | Posted on 2009-08-27 00:00:00 | by poet09 | [ Reply to This ]
      Its nice to see someone write from their heart.
    Spelling is not a sign of intelligence, so never mind the other guy. This piece is well written.
    Remember: first wirte from your heart and re-write from your head.

    Bobby K.
    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2009-08-25 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow this is very passionate and trule expressive, although i have to say theres some spelling errors it doesnt affect the meaning which still stays beautiful. The flow is ok, would have changed some things but then again that could also change the uniqueness of the piece. Love truly is a beautiful emotion and i think you have portrayed it quite passionately and very descriptive. I believe with a bit of polishing this piece could become a masterpiece. Well just my two cents haha.
    | Posted on 2009-08-25 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]

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