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    dots Submission Name: Memories from raindots
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    Author: totojane03
    ASL Info:    25- colorado springs
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 151/77/35
    Words: 212
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsMemories from raindots
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    Today I smelt raindrops awaking tears of pain,
    Memories that faded in to yesterdays rain,
    Looking back into the past,
    Remembering things that shattered,
    Like broken glass,
    Insanity sunk in,
    I was lost in a bottle,
    I couldn't seem to win,
    Blackouts would arise,
    As time seemed to fly by,
    Erasing moments that soon had me cry,
    I sat in wonder of what had happened,
    The night before,
    I couldn't remember even walking in the door,
    A hangover sets in and I put the bottles to my mouth again,
    Unsure why I shake,
    As my heartbeat seems to be in a race,
    It had seemed that drinking was only what had worked to shut my nerves down,
    As the sun shines in my window,
    I see a mirro image of who I used to be,
    And who I dont want to be,
    Why can't I stop drinking I'd wonder,
    But not ever have the answer,
    So I sat and waited for night to fall,
    Maybe the black outs wouldn't happen at all,
    As I watched the rain,
    I felt so unclean,My mind just pounderd on these unhealthy,thoughts as the rain felt like knifes,I thought I must of been insain,
    But I wasnt the problem it was yesterdays Memories that brought the rain.




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      A really great write with a lot of feeling to show the hurt of your past. But what makes us stronger as people is after we go through something like that we are still able to move forward never forgetting what brought us to that point.

    Excellent write

    Poet09
    | Posted on 2009-08-26 00:00:00 | by poet09 | [ Reply to This ]
      a really great right with alot of many emotions in this , it keept me enteretaind and gluded to the screen I like this poem it sounds really great and one of you best ones that I add to favorite.s


    totojane
    | Posted on 2009-08-24 00:00:00 | by totojane03 | [ Reply to This ]


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