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    dots Submission Name: gonedots
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    Author: totojane03
    ASL Info:    25- colorado springs
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 151/77/35
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsgonedots
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    The clock tics like the sand in an hour glass,
    That just lets time slip away,
    And memories to faded like roses that slowly die, or like wet tears that easly get wiped away, And have no say,
    The petals blow in the wind,
    There such light weight,
    There breath taken away,
    Blown like dirt,
    Not remembered when they are gone,
    Its importance fade like lyrics from an old song.




    Submitted on 2009-08-24 16:00:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow......Such powerfull words Greatly apprciated.I thought about writing it differently but it didnt sound right at the time.
    I thought something was missing though couldn't place it...
    Glad that you enjoyed this piece.....

    Totojane
    | Posted on 2009-08-25 00:00:00 | by totojane03 | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting topic and very well described here, every line is a message in its own that carries a powerful meaning, i really enjoyed this piece and think its quite well laid out although i would have used stanzas to break it down into separate ideas but im not too sure if this would have been the right approach. The whole piece is rather short and straightforward and it doesnt beat around the bush. I think this is some of your better writing here and you should expand on this style. I enjoyed it. Thanks.
    | Posted on 2009-08-25 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]


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