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    dots Submission Name: Heard!?dots
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    Author: vanhokinshtyl
    ASL Info:    8/M/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 119/200/71
    Words: 204
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 486
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    dotsHeard!?dots
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    There's a kitchen in the fryer now,
    The fire burned the kitchen down,
    The vegetables are melting now
    And being thrown away.

    Don't you ever...
    Take the easy way out again,
    Or you'll be lying about the ocean
    Where you say you used to swim..

    If you got it in your mind that's it's alright,
    Then it's alright, and it's alright if it's all right until it's wrong,
    You heard, but you say you never knew it.

    Don't you ever...
    Take the easy way out again,
    Or you'll be lying about the ocean
    Where you say you used to swim..

    ...When you were young, you say you were better at everything,
    Evidently your only talent now is talking and pretending,
    How'd you lose it if you were so much better before?
    You 're-lie' on the past to secure your future...

    ...Cause no one would ever...
    Know the difference anyway,
    If they were lost yesterday,
    They'll surely still be lost today,

    They'll believe in anything that you feed them,
    While they're eating off your table, you'll be eating them back alive
    Like zombies in the night,
    Except they arrive at four or five,
    The living dead...
    They're approaching closer




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