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    dots Submission Name: Mementodots
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    Author: Clayman
    ASL Info:    28 - getting late
    Elite Ratio:    6.34 - 609/327/167
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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    dotsMementodots
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    Pins pushed from calculus mind
    Formative fires of elusive kind

    Words falling
    Shatter to the ground
    Prove their existence
    Silence knows not sound.

    All but destroyed - my reason to live
    Your turn now to get what you give.

    Solemn racing death
    ghosts the final breath
    Emanate this to crystal
    so i can adjust my hate.

    I am happy now
    knowing i cannot love.

    -Svw




    Submitted on 2009-08-25 03:56:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i can't really explain why I like this piece so much...it just seems to fit me. This poem is like a piece of art I would display in my home...maybe to scare people away or weed out the smart ones with it. Anyway, excellently written. Hats off to you.
    | Posted on 2009-08-25 00:00:00 | by Jessa | [ Reply to This ]


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