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    dots Submission Name: Wordless Waterdots
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    Author: coloredstone
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 99/60/37
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Description:
       As you might guess, I wrote this while it was raining. It's really an on-impulse piece so I think it could use second opinions and some good ironing out.


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    dotsWordless Waterdots
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    Soft water sprinkling
    Upon my feet
    Wetting the world
    Won’t you speak?

    Have you been?
    There, so long ago,
    In a river or in the sky
    Or the cupped hands of the first man?

    Have you been
    Where a man stopped to rest
    Bleeding and beaten
    For speaking the truth?

    Water streaming
    From the sky
    Wetting the plains
    Won’t you speak?

    Have you been
    There, in the home
    Of a poor, destitute
    Dirty, unfit to drink?

    Water dripping sweet
    Off towering crowns and greens
    Dampening hard cores
    Won’t you speak?

    Have you been
    In a pool of tears
    Where a child cried
    Unheard by the world, ignored?

    Water washing
    Down my thoughts
    Tears roll down
    My dampened cheeks

    Water, all the places
    That you’ve been
    No words are there
    For you to speak

    Just the tears that fall
    Can say it all, remind us
    Those who forget
    And who cries with the rain?
    &#8195;




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      gee i really like this piece...

    all the bad things we see, all the poverty, the abuse all the bad stuff for which there are no longer words...just tears...the eyes speak with water...

    i am quite taken by the sadness...and "who cries with the rain"

    it's like every storm...is so many people in the world crying at the same time...

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-04-21 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      huh, i read it and thought it was to dreamy like an poet over doing it with imagination, or something, but dont get me wrong it is an nice write
    | Posted on 2010-09-17 00:00:00 | by theinforment | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah! Beautiful. Wonderful. Spectacular.

    This write is AMAZING.

    I wonder where each drop was before they all came together. Sometimes it wish things could speak, to tell an exciting story. Like a used couch from a garage sale. Where its been. What its seen. It makes me wonder.

    "Just the tears that fall
    Can say it all, remind us
    Those who forget
    And who cries with the rain?"

    I love the end. its very inspirational, i think imma write something about rain.

    It just needs some tweaks and it'll defanatly be a favorite.

    Buster
    | Posted on 2009-09-06 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]


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