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    dots Submission Name: Only if you really wanted to...dots
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    Author: coloredstone
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 99/60/37
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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    Description:
       lyrics I guess, although my team couldn't put together a good tune for it. Ah well, it isn't even complete yet. Readers please suggest how to make it longer!


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    If you really wanted to see the daylight
    You would never grow tired walking through the night.

    If you really wanted to stand on a mountain top
    You’d never tire of climbing up.

    You'd never turn around
    never think of going down
    nor even to see the ground

    If you really wanted to see the mountain top
    You'd get to see it one day, no doubt.




    Submitted on 2009-08-25 06:28:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I've seen the mountain top, and I grew very tired both on my way up and on my way back down. Still, while I was there, at the precipice I found it awe inspiring. I found it lovely. I found it beautiful. And might I say, a tiny bit sad. I guess my point is, it doesn't matter if you grow tired. It matters that you keep going. In fact, that may be the most important part of the journey.

    Still, your thoughts are interesting. Maybe you could make it longer by describing some of what I just described.

    Just be careful not to make it sound too much like that "Climb" song by Miley Cyrus! lol
    | Posted on 2011-11-29 00:00:00 | by JanePlane | [ Reply to This ]
      im madly in love with all your writing. ha.

    ideas to make it longer?

    add a verse about accomplishing dreams

    "if you really want to..." (fly/live/be happy/be free/move mountains/touch the sky/find ...)...(some line)... "youll find a way"

    sorry writers block over here.
    | Posted on 2009-09-19 00:00:00 | by Theophilus | [ Reply to This ]
      I think your on a role!
    Beautiful.
    I think i may have a tune, but yea it needs more.

    Fana
    | Posted on 2009-09-06 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      Its quite inspirational....

    This is like your inner being challenging you to defy your dreams....


    Kinda like saying " the only reason you will never get there is because of you and no one else"

    If you really wanted something, then there is nothing else, nothing that's real but that.


    Very nice!

    I can see as lyrics, It would make a cool song....

    Andrea
    | Posted on 2009-08-25 00:00:00 | by ladydeathstrike | [ Reply to This ]


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