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    dots Submission Name: Porcelaindots
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    Author: bigohhh1
    ASL Info:    31/M/Fl
    Elite Ratio:    3.35 - 25/21/37
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 354
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 423



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    dotsPorcelaindots
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    Porcelain Goddess
    Skin obviously fired from the purest clay
    My heart smiles to even think of you
    No pain or peril
    No man or mess
    Could stop me from seeing you
    I keep repeating she is REAL she is REAL
    John Keats wrote that "if something is not beautiful, it is probably not true."
    Well She is TRUE more Truth than I have ever known.
    My Perfect One




    Submitted on 2009-08-25 16:14:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I absolutely LOVE this!... the flow is a little off, but for me poetry doesn't have to flow. And I like how you slid in a wonderful Keats quote and used it to accentuate your work. Kudos!
    | Posted on 2010-08-16 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]


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