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    dots Submission Name: true lovedots
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    Author: StainedxBlades
    ASL Info:    19/f/ Mass
    Elite Ratio:    1.76 - 8/13/24
    Words: 179
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 51
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    Bytes: 997



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    dotstrue lovedots
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    i will love you till the end of time
    i wish i didn't commit this crime
    i only wish now that you could forgive
    because without you i cannot live
    you're in my heart, and there you'll stay
    for as long as i live not excluding one day
    you are my savior and i live for you
    it hurts so bad now that its through
    i cannot bare to be apart
    could you let me back in your heart
    wounds, they say, time heals all
    but if you leave i'll continue to fall
    in the future i know you'll see
    that me with you is the way to be
    i would do anything for one more kiss
    holding you close is my only bliss
    i give you my hand and with it my life
    till death do us part with no more strife
    without you, am i now left
    you are the air in my every breath
    so tell me, how am i supposed to breathe with no air
    because thats how i feel when you're not there




    Submitted on 2009-08-25 18:41:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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