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    dots Submission Name: Darkdots
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    Author: emogirl5000
    Elite Ratio:    1.11 - 0/2/11
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Misc/Dark
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    Dark world, dark life...
    Every thing seems so dark.
    No one seems to truly care.

    Streams of tears flow down my cheek.
    Now the streams seem to only peek out at the world.
    So muck pain and darkness.
    Nothing seems the same any more.

    Dark...
    I never seen the light any more just the dark.
    Darkness fills my heart.
    Life seems so unreal.

    The pain in my heart seems to grow to quickly.
    Growing slower than my hatred.

    I feel so non-existent.
    No one comes near me like I'm sick.
    So i fall in this never ending hole with no one to holed.
    This never ending hole is so dark my heart has no way to feel better about this life...




    Submitted on 2009-08-25 19:53:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      You're young... You need to clearly think about the words of your poem as they come to be, craft your poems with cunning and ruthless thoughts. Let it be natural, let it be more detailed. Pour yourself into the poem rather than trying to create a shallow poem like this, just based off of a lack of emotion, except for the one you speak of.

    Make beautiful misery, not dry words slapped out.

    In time your skills will come to furition.

    -Dustin
    | Posted on 2009-08-25 00:00:00 | by HisNameIsNoMore | [ Reply to This ]

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