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    dots Submission Name: Feline Frenzydots

    Author: Jessa
    ASL Info:    29/f/pa
    Elite Ratio:    3.73 - 221/209/73
    Words: 223
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       I'm at the point of giving up...but my cat has no one else. He is my lifeline at the moment. Poor thing. Documentation that states one cannot physically work is not enough for some people to get help. I refuse to pop out babies for the welfare to pay for. Heaven forbid we help responsible people who truly cannot work. They don't have children...they won't be missed. This is probably my worst piece, by the way...just felt the need to bitch a little and sit in my shit.

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    dotsFeline Frenzydots

    The cat curls up at the edge of the bed
    No idea what's in mommy's head
    There's plenty of food for my furry friend
    But the supplies for my belly have come to an end

    Laid off from my job and living alone
    One room apartment to consider my home
    Bills roll in on a daily basis
    I bury my head to hide from the faces

    The government pays for those with kids
    Hand-outs for those who can't close their lids
    I have no children because I wasn't ready
    Can't bring a life into the unsteady

    No medical, no food stamps, no hope to pay rent
    My straightened-out life is officially bent
    My health gets worse through every tear that falls
    No motivation to answer my calls

    I cannot survive without medication
    Damn this cat and his dedication!
    Don't want to fight for pity pay
    But I promised my cat that I would stay

    Doctors say disabled, but the government denies
    Who made them the Lord of the Flies?
    Got to keep going for promises made
    Without this damn cat I could peacefully fade

    My beautiful cat, my only child
    All that is innocent is all that is wild
    Through the trials of this world that threaten to kill
    My baby boy is my wonder pill.

    Submitted on 2009-08-25 22:11:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Aaah, this is well structured and well written, even though it conveys a sad message. It has good structure, style, and tells a lucid story! The cat doesn't even know how lucky it is, and you are such a good samaratin to care for your cat even when you are denied yourself.

    I just hope and pray that things get better for you, pretty lady! We all love you and wish you well here at Elite!
    | Posted on 2009-08-26 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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