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    dots Submission Name: Schooldots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Rant/Longing
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    dotsSchooldots
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    School is now in session,
    School buses are making their rounds each morning,
    You can hear their back fire, and squealing of brakes.

    As children run to catch the bus,
    my mind fills with thoughts...

    If only I knew what I know now, then!
    How things would be so different
    if only I could turn the hands of this clock

    I would take back my attempted suicide,
    I would take back all the harmful drugs I pushed into this body,
    I'd take back all those dishonest things I've done!

    OH, how things would be different,
    if for some way I could know the things I do now back then,

    I long to tell these children...
    DO NOT take your parents for granted
    DO your best in school, you'll be glad you did later in life
    NO MATTER what stay away from drugs




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      An excellent write, that will do others a lot of good! I admire that you had the courage and the good intentions to write this!

    | Posted on 2009-08-30 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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