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    dots Submission Name: I Am Broken... I Am Lostdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    21/F/Oh
    Elite Ratio:    4.19 - 406/313/187
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Fanfic/Depressed
    Total Views: 80
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    Bytes: 1017



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       Sigh I hate her I love her... can't be both... CAN IT?


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    dotsI Am Broken... I Am Lostdots
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    As the rain from the heavens,
    hits my roof top,
    my thoughts begin to run.

    As does my blood,
    running from these cuts I have caused myself.
    Dripping from my arms,
    as the rain drips from the paradise above

    I am broken.
    I am lost.

    These tears trickle off my cheeks,
    as does the blood from my heart,
    due to the disarray you have left it in.

    I am broken.
    I am lost.

    You have me all worked up due to your selfishness!
    Due to your ignorance, and blindness
    You Mother,

    Have Left Me Broken,
    You Left Me Lost.





    Submitted on 2009-08-25 22:54:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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