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    dots Submission Name: I Am Broken... I Am Lostdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Fanfic/Depressed
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       Sigh I hate her I love her... can't be both... CAN IT?


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    dotsI Am Broken... I Am Lostdots
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    As the rain from the heavens,
    hits my roof top,
    my thoughts begin to run.

    As does my blood,
    running from these cuts I have caused myself.
    Dripping from my arms,
    as the rain drips from the paradise above

    I am broken.
    I am lost.

    These tears trickle off my cheeks,
    as does the blood from my heart,
    due to the disarray you have left it in.

    I am broken.
    I am lost.

    You have me all worked up due to your selfishness!
    Due to your ignorance, and blindness
    You Mother,

    Have Left Me Broken,
    You Left Me Lost.





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      Hard to know what to say to this one..... we are taught to define ourselves by the edicts of other people. Parents, friends, peers... and as we accept all these definitions of what we should, or must or need to be... we forget ourselves and our individuality.... we become part of the "group think" ... brave is the heart and strong is the character that swims against the stream... and defines him/herself as something unique. They find gradually and slowly as the inherited definitions of themselves fall away, that they are stronger and more understanding and they realise their potential as a unique and beautiful individual.

    We grant authority. It does not mean to say that anyone can or should dictate to us the coarse of our soul, spirit or life.......

    Remembering always that this gift of persona is the conduit for love.

    :) Amen. LOL
    | Posted on 2009-12-10 00:00:00 | by col13x | [ Reply to This ]


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