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    dots Submission Name: The Morning Afterdots
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    Author: Cayman
    ASL Info:    31
    Elite Ratio:    2.77 - 182/168/72
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsThe Morning Afterdots
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    Through daunting eyes we awake.
    Stretching tense muscles then covering exposed parts from conditioned air.
    Your head lays back on my chest while my fingers massage the groove down your back.
    One kiss on the forehead seals the deal; you are mine and mine forever.
    I love watching you fall back into your dreamscape.
    Ahhh, your hair smells like rose dipped rain.
    Be careful, I don’t want to wake up my damsel while she’s sleeping.
    I creep away, only to appear with a tray and your favorite meal of the day.
    You suddenly awake and I ask you, how do you feel the morning after?




    Submitted on 2009-08-25 23:08:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    danica
    | Posted on 2009-09-02 00:00:00 | by larkspur | [ Reply to This ]
      a beautiful piece but u were too much in a hurry to deepen the suspense which should have sustained our curiousity...
    overall, twas brilliant!
    | Posted on 2009-08-26 00:00:00 | by realpassion | [ Reply to This ]
      thats absolutly beautiful work very well written!
    | Posted on 2009-08-26 00:00:00 | by dark silence | [ Reply to This ]


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