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    dots Submission Name: "Brevity"dots
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    Author: Clayman
    ASL Info:    28 - getting late
    Elite Ratio:    6.34 - 609/327/167
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 721
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 825



    Description:
       A random piece about forgiveness and lies and the hurts connected to this.


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    dots"Brevity"dots
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    Forgiveness cries out against guarantee
    as pain stakes boast no warnings.
    Absolution marionette preceded by crows
    leads the woeful dinner of distressed-duette.

    Conceded approach permits tarred-ratio.
    Incognito's scapegoat prays revival.
    Attainment of the white grasp is folly
    .
    Sorrows shared saves sinking ships.

    Situations in ever-change decline planning
    for humble hatred promotes good health.
    Precision in thought defers shunned conscience
    as keys to revelations sail in patience


    Pearlescent truth in omnipotent conformity.
    Prevarication minuet-roulette remits fallacies.

    Relinquished lies - the sweet cancer of words.

    -Svw




    Submitted on 2009-08-25 23:58:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I can't see a thing, Shawn. :(

    Your poetry is so abstract and vague.

    Or maybe your poetry is just way over my head. You know me and how I enjoy being able to see. With some of your poetry, I am utterly blind.

    What are you trying to say here exactly? You dance around with riddles. Why not just be plain?

    -mo-
    | Posted on 2009-09-24 00:00:00 | by mojymo | [ Reply to This ]


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