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    dots Submission Name: Crumpets and Teadots
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    Author: mojymo
    Elite Ratio:    6.48 - 42/47/36
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsCrumpets and Teadots
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    I put the kettle on.
    Meanwhile, the crumpets are fresh.
    Help yourself.

    Help yourself because I can't do it for you.
    My only desire today
    is to sit back in this iron chair
    and share a cup or two
    in your company.
    Is that too much to want?

    You've got a million wishes
    burning your lips,
    stuck in the crackling flames
    of themselves,
    and fangs to hold them tight.
    I laugh when watching one
    wiggle free from its confinement.
    You bite down too late
    and puncture two red holes
    in your bottom lip.

    I know you see my wishes, too,
    and my puncture wounds
    raw
    with disappointment.

    But life serves no one.

    Here's your tea.
    Have a crumpet.

    Sunday, August 2, 2009
    12:59 am
    End: 1:18 am




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