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The Present

Author: thejitterBUG
ASL Info:    16/M/xxxx
Elite Ratio:    6.96 - 2 /1 /5
Words: 185
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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Just a depressed view of the present. The modern era we were crappily born into. The 21st Century is a crap fest. Now that you know, what're you gonna do? Let go;let live; let doom?

The Present

When WWIII's just behind
your bedroom walls;
When all you ever hear are
slanderous calls?
What're you going to do?
Let go? Let live? Let doom?

When misery is your only
When every one else could
care less and share sympathy?
What's left for you to do?
Spike the glass, succumb to alcohol too.

When you see a blinding light,
hopeful and enthralling;
when you hear the screams
filled with pain and agony?
Do you look back?
Or thread on; of sympathy you lack.

When all you see is
Anarchy and bloodshed;
When all you read is the threatening
Cold Wars up ahead?
Will you stay or carry through?
Pull the trigger, after 1 then 2.

When you stumble
in an empty hallway;
When faces with no faces
smile your way?
What do you think of?
Hell or heaven? Since, Earth is far off.

When the world begins
crumbling, falling, breaking;
when no one dares to sit
beside you, weeping, waiting, breaking?
What do you do?
Let go? Let live? Let doom?

Submitted on 2009-08-26 03:09:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Damn, Bugface. :)
Haha. That was a great poem, and it just doesn't need any more improving. The rhythm is great, and everyone else is to. I can't even give constructive critism.. xD The world is cruel, but we all have to live in it.

| Posted on 2009-08-26 00:00:00 | by smexybabe0101 | [ Reply to This ]

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