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    dots Submission Name: "Chronos"dots
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    Author: Clayman
    ASL Info:    28 - getting late
    Elite Ratio:    6.34 - 609/327/167
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Trapped
    Total Views: 621
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 804



    Description:
       Transitory states of time indefinite.


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    dots"Chronos"dots
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    Atomic boulders descend past pinched waist.
    Top mirrors bottom - as above so below.
    Actions fluid indicate time's movement
    ,
    what once was can never again be.

    Reflection painted in grimace sneers back
    ,
    yesterday's tide still fresh in my mind
    Kingdoms are on offer for just one moment.
    Sadly the glass prison never sleeps
    .
    Everyday's an inversion of yesterday's heaps.

    Acceptance dilemma toils within.
    Rejection to acknoweledge - dance of death.
    Answers apparent by chronological pass.
    Timely dance continues, stasis for none.

    Many a man's lesion stems from time's elegant transition.

    -Svw




    Submitted on 2009-08-26 07:25:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      That's a lovely poem,
    I like it alotly, (i am lost for words>.< I know.. 'alotly' what am i thinking)..
    Thank you for writing this.
    | Posted on 2009-10-04 00:00:00 | by GrIm:)ReApEr | [ Reply to This ]
      That was a cool poem i actually added it to my favorites!!
    | Posted on 2009-09-29 00:00:00 | by vannamay | [ Reply to This ]
      Wonderful matrix of paradoxes! Atomic boulders, grains of sand, the eternal prisoners might be feeling honoured to hear this. I think an hour glass is a pretty romantic idea but only from the outside.

    and the last line is pretty clinical in its startling description but finally it is a good intellectual piece, worth reading several times to grasp its multifarious nuances.

    Liked it a lot!!!!
    | Posted on 2009-08-26 00:00:00 | by loveforever | [ Reply to This ]


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