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    dots Submission Name: Grief has cracked me opendots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
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    dotsGrief has cracked me opendots
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    Slumberlike, bitter sweet
    as a crisp packet in mourning
    as it rests on dewy grass.
    Alas
    She is no more.
    The tumbleweed rolls by,
    as the dust settles,
    my tears draw rivlets
    down my cheeks.
    Morning has broken
    and grief has split my heart
    in two
    laughter resides in one half
    I shut the door on it
    and wallow in the other
    where I welcome the mud of death becoming.
    And shun life.

    I am sodden from my own depths
    of racked ribs
    and bleeding memories
    I am cracked
    and opened
    naked and exposed for all to see
    and care I not a jot.

    Grief is like that.




    Submitted on 2009-08-26 16:43:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It all comes down to the bare bones feelings when grief comes.
    Nothing else matters and we just hurt for the life we've lost.
    And every time we revisit some else who has passed and find something new to heal.

    this is very real and I feel it Kate. Just came by to leave some love.

    Nan
    | Posted on 2009-10-16 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]


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