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    dots Submission Name: Deathly Slumberdots
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    Author: fictionalfiend
    ASL Info:    17/F/My mind
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 24/17/15
    Words: 54
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       This was something I wrote on a sleepless night.


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    dotsDeathly Slumberdots
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    My limbs are heavy.
    I can barely move
    Noise ripples across me
    But Iím too exhausted to move

    My eyelids are drooping
    I have trouble keeping them open
    My senses are shutting down.
    One.
    By.
    One.

    Itís time to give in
    To let time take itís course
    Itís time to sleep.




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