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    dots Submission Name: Achilles Heeldots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 302
    Class/Type: Poetry/Legend
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    Achilles Heel


    Who will remember
    The names of spent blood
    On the epitaphs and cenotaphs
    To unknown soldiers
    This centuries pile of
    Unknown heroes

    Their legend is no longer written
    Or remembered
    Achilles

    They die in their droves and in secrecy
    Still the puppets of golden kings
    Whos petty trinket
    Is the cost of their lives it took to buy with
    Not for love
    Or for honour
    Achilles
    No not even for eternity
    Achilles

    And all the Gods you so defied
    In your brazen burnish of courage
    Are now those deities you so despised
    As faceless
    Behind their armouries and vaults
    In their quiet sanctities of control
    More a mockery
    Of your brave heart
    Achilles

    And where now the Iliad of legend
    Where now the memories of centuries
    In the counting currencies of terrorism

    They die in their droves
    For a cause less than noble
    When they could have stood defiant of the Gods
    And at least chosen to have died for themselves
    Achilles
    And not in the cost of counting banks
    And not as pawns on a political map
    Still believing in the lie
    In every falsehood contrived to deceive
    A warriors heart
    Achilles

    Who will recall
    Those names of spent blood
    On the epitaphs and cenotaphs
    To bravery marked
    In the tombs of unknown soldiers
    This centuries pile up
    Of unknown heroes

    Their legend is no longer written
    Or remembered
    Passed and forgotten with the people who loved them

    Who will remember them
    Achilles

    For centuries your defiance of Gods
    Kings and men
    Has stood
    Achilles could not be bought

    But there are no heroes anymore

    Achilles














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