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    dots Submission Name: Ridedots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 269
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
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    Lift up a final kiss
    A single moment
    On a monolith to lips

    Pick up the crest
    And with it on the rushing edge
    Ending into oblivion

    Find me then
    In the hurricane
    Of your heart

    But for a single drop of doubt
    Impeach deliverance

    Spiral staircases roller coaster
    Into your mind
    Where in the fields of dust
    I stand alone

    Lift to your cheek
    The tears in my hand

    Unburden the forest fires
    Which sting my eyes
    Break me at my knees
    And set me free

    With this flight into eternity


    Rushing still to the ever present ground
    Delivered at last
    To the darkness
    That carried me
    On your wings

    And if one night
    My soul should cry out in screeching prayer
    If it should be bound forever to those echoes
    To those paltry psalms of wisdom
    Which sleep in the chill
    Forget me

    Forget I was ever there

    Riding on the lances of dreams
    Skating on the sun shaft plains
    As I am passing
    Ever to flit and flirt with the silence in your heart


    Ride with me

    Lift up a final kiss
    A single monument
    On a monolith to lips

    Feel in your hankering wings
    All the strength I am
    I fought to the last breath
    The wretched plummet

    See always in your mirror
    I am
    And was
    The mirror
    Of your soul

    Time to ride
    And let go

    Out, out into the wide and open

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