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Bird


Author: Fraser
ASL Info:    26
Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 30 /55 /35
Words: 61
Class/Type: Poetry /Nature
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Description:


a bird resting in a tree


Bird



Bird on a branch
pruning its wings
far from the ranch
where it usually sings

the suns going down
the light hits your body
a moment is found
nothing is rowdy

the scent of a flower
awakens your senses
you fly by the tower
past the picket fences

at last you are gone
away from the green lawn




Submitted on 2009-08-27 13:46:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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