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    dots Submission Name: The Rosedots
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    Author: WhiteTiger
    ASL Info:    18
    Elite Ratio:    2.88 - 17/16/11
    Words: 187
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe Rosedots
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    Once there lived a patch of weeds
    average, dull and plain
    niether special nor unique
    they were all the same

    but amoung the weeds there lived a rose
    who was distinct in everyway
    seperate from the weeds around
    they were night and he was day

    knowing nothing of love or beauty
    the weeds could not see him for his grace
    they knew nothing of his splendour
    or his calm and warm embrace

    and true the rose was different
    not like any weed
    unlike the foul and ugly plants
    the red rose knew no greed

    A diamond in a world of rocks
    a rainbow amongst the grey
    but instead of feeling vanity
    he felt sorrow and dismay

    But alas this story has no end
    for the rose has yet not died
    living in his world of woe
    putting himself aside

    Happy endings come to pass
    but not yet for our friend
    as life goes on it's up to weeds
    to see beauty and amend



















    Submitted on 2009-08-27 14:28:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I've seen some communities where nearly everybody is modest and loving. When I read this trenchant and disturbing poem, I first thought: "Maybe this person needs to get on a bus ... " but then I thought: "Maybe they already did!"
    | Posted on 2009-09-13 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a very good poem, i love how you defined the rose as a person. It was almost like a story about the best part of beauty and that no one ever really notices true forms of it. I would definitly have to say that my most favorite parts are the 3rd and 5th stanzas

    "knowing nothing of love or beauty
    the weeds could not see him for his grace
    they knew nothing of his splendour
    or his calm and warm embrace"

    "A diamond in a world of rocks
    a rainbow amongst the grey
    but instead of feeling vanity
    he felt sorrow and dismay"

    these parts are absolutly fantastic and the rhyming is super. It gives the reader a sense of how unique that beauty is.

    Exellent job. Looking forword to seeing more poems about beauty and such. LOL there my favorite kinds.

    Lance

    | Posted on 2009-08-29 00:00:00 | by Lancelot | [ Reply to This ]


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