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    dots Submission Name: Prayer From The Heartdots
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    Author: Raindrops
    ASL Info:    23/f/Pennsylvania
    Elite Ratio:    2.49 - 182/209/284
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Poetry/Religious
    Total Views: 37
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    Description:
       Written on August 27, 2009.


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    dots Prayer From The Heartdots
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    Trying not to poison mind
    of thoughts I want to leave behind
    of how my future could be lost
    with me paying happiness as cost

    Oh, how I hope things are not
    that such sadness would not be brought
    My heart burns for this to hold
    Such news, I do not want to be told

    But I'm sure that things are not
    What my mind is telling me
    Another tactic to crush my spirit
    and choke the life right out of me

    Alot of thoughts pass through my mind
    That make me sad and are unkind
    I try to push them from my head
    cuz the future I don't wish to dread

    My Lord, please don't let this be
    Uplift me and hold me
    Make my heart's yearnings a reality
    and please don't let us fall into calamity.




    Submitted on 2009-08-27 21:49:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This sounds so ominous and foreboding; musing on a misfortune that one wants to avoid. But a melancholy and ominous mood is part of the poem structure, and leaves the reader wistfully hoping for the best for you! We all have been captured by these forebodings, and have memories related to them.

    I hope this is based on a muse and not on a real foreboding or hardship! I always wish the best for you, pretty lady!
    | Posted on 2009-09-28 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Very very very nice writing here!
    Very talented it all goes together with the title an gets the readers attention and very entertaining.

    Thanks
    totojane
    | Posted on 2009-08-29 00:00:00 | by totojane03 | [ Reply to This ]



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