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    dots Submission Name: Let us be Gladdots
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    Author: Rhythmal
    Elite Ratio:    2.52 - 22/22/19
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
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       This one got away from me a little, but I think it worked out pretty well.


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    dotsLet us be Gladdots
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    Let us be glad, for the lives we live,
    For the Truths we give.
    For future lying at our feet,
    For the past that nothing can defeat.
    For the people that we hold so dear,
    May they never have to live in fear.
    The friends we've known for all our lives,
    The loves we've had, the ones that died.
    The children dreaming peacefully,
    of happy days it gets to me, it makes me think of years to come, While others think of those gone bye.
    Someday I'll be old, Someday I'll die.
    But for now I'll be glad
    For lives well lived.




    Submitted on 2009-08-27 22:28:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I agree with fiction..it remids me of a prayer or wellbeing wish? it flowed together so well. good read..good write.
    | Posted on 2009-09-19 00:00:00 | by FadedSilence | [ Reply to This ]
      another great write! Very taltented, dont worrire about the spelling thats not important what is important is that you write from the heart.

    totojane
    | Posted on 2009-08-29 00:00:00 | by totojane03 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi, great thoughts, forgive my edit. ok

    Let’s be glad for we live

    For the Truths we receive

    For a future lying at our feet

    For a past that none can defeat

    For a friend that we hold so dear

    May they never have to live in fear

    The people we known for all our lives

    The loves we've had and ones that died

    For the children that dream on peacefully

    These happy days that you and I share too

    think of years to come and those gone bye

    Someday we all get old and someday die

    But for now be glad for lives we live well.
    | Posted on 2009-08-29 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a nice cheerful, almost prayer like piece. I'm just not sure about the end. I think it could be extended by a line. Maybe something like:
    "But for now I'll be glad
    For lives well lived
    And days gone by"
    ?
    Just a thought. *shrug*
    Otherwise it's a lovely uplifting work.
    | Posted on 2009-08-28 00:00:00 | by fictionalfiend | [ Reply to This ]


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