Well I have only read the comments given by others but I shall give my unbiased review....
1. Pathetic and forced rhyming and no sense as a poem at all.
2. Nice work if this is NOT a poem.....(Change the style from poem to verses/thoughts...something else but definitely not a poem)
3. Who the hell is Jane?
4. I am not pissed off as i see others are somehow. Its rudely put up, but in all manners you have definitely expressed what you felt towards Jane.(whoever she may be)
5. Try redefining what is currently misspelled as a poem in your brain to something else.
so tell me something.
did you suddenly decide hey! I'm going to push other people down? look i know im young.
but here's the thing. picking on someone to make yourself seem smarter or better..yeah..not working so well.
I liked your poetry...but honestly...
I didn't like the way you attacked her. she has been nothing but sweet to everyone. and maybe her spelling isn't the best. hell. my spelling isn't the best. but thats what learning and writing does. and i'm sorry you are that arrogant that you think anyone who can't spell is (in your words)...a druggie or a drunk or stupid. I'm sorry that you think you are better than everyone. cus atleast i know what it is like to re-fix a poem and it turns out better than before. or to re-write a song and love it.
and don't screw with people's emotions. how would you feel if I found something that hurt you and you wrote your feelings down and I just came and said "all you do is promise to kill yourself...why don't you?" so you know what .
I feel so sorry for your arrogant ass. cus while you're big and high by yourself. I'm down and low with my friends. nice work. idoit!
The only thing that offends me is how badly it's written. As parody it's not funny, as poetry it's barely thought out and I guess as an elite skills poem it will do fine. But really, a horrible lack of a proper rhyming scheme, forced rhymes wherever one finds them and a dis-jointed confused motiff turn this into a real stinker. You said nothing in the poem that wasn't in your description allready. Nonsense.
so what if she has errors? are you an infallible human dictionary with super godlike powers? each to their own i say, but posting demeaning, offensive stuff like this merely shows you for what you are: vindictive, jealous and rather obsessive-compulsive about other's lives.
would you like some catty nutter harping on at you about every single mistake? perhaps she doesn't give a flying hoot what you think?
grow up. move on.
and smell some flowers for chrissakes.