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    Author: wolfgurl830
    ASL Info:    18/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    0.96 - 42/38/34
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 664
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 410



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    This story
    Child hood love
    You know that story of a boy and a girl
    Well I’ll tell you my version the girl side of this
    I met you when we were young
    Then I teased you
    Then I left you
    Then I saw you
    And realized I love you




    Submitted on 2009-08-28 08:52:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      That is a good definition of how some love starts. It's simple and deep. Very good work.
    | Posted on 2009-09-03 00:00:00 | by extrEMO | [ Reply to This ]
      Simple but very powerful. I suposse the saying "less is more' apply's to this one. Very nice. A pretty/cute peice.
    | Posted on 2009-08-28 00:00:00 | by WhiteTiger | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a really nice piece. I love that, "I played you before" feel to it... It starts cliché and then ends SO non-cliché that it's almost scary how you wheeled that giant "U turn" and brought it to a perfect park. It's always later than you decide you love them, I think. Nicely put, all the way through.
    | Posted on 2009-08-28 00:00:00 | by jezracrow | [ Reply to This ]


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