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    dots Submission Name: Internal Suicidedots
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    Author: poet09
    Elite Ratio:    3.77 - 141/146/104
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       Give me your thoughts and comments... I wrote this because it has a lot to do with me not having my father in my life.....


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    dotsInternal Suicidedots
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    My wounds opened, victim of life
    only the beginning, with this knife
    Drinking this liquid, I cry out
    my worthless life, filled with doubt

    My soul knows, nothing else
    since day one, all by myself
    Lacking a love, without my dad
    something most kids, wish they had

    So I sit, and ask why
    why didn't you, say good-bye
    Hatred builds up, filled with rage
    all locked in, I feel caged

    Tearing my soul, consuming abyss
    make believe fantasy, a nightmare's bliss
    Still your blood, runs in my veins
    never to forgive, but forget your name

    Cold as stone, losing myself
    heartless words, disregarding my health
    Bitter lonely soul, countless days I cried
    so broken up, my soul's died........................




    Submitted on 2009-08-28 11:01:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I personally think this is an amazing write the emotion present in this piece i have delt alot with. and so it is hard to condem a piece for that. i think that it is written very well and it was easy to read and flows very well. personally i wouldnt change anything. although i do hope that through writing pieces like this you can work through your issues with your father
    | Posted on 2009-08-28 00:00:00 | by sweet_rayne | [ Reply to This ]



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