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    dots Submission Name: The Drowning Mermandots
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    Author: jezracrow
    ASL Info:    90+/F/Witness Relocation
    Elite Ratio:    6.52 - 10/6/4
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Drowning Mermandots
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    I remember Mexico without you,
    a rain-scented suitcase of cotton lies
    tossed overboard in deep waters,
    your watch and handgun later traded
    for a bag of red mangoes and fresh sandals
    on shady back roads behind Tapa's Bar
    near that lonely beach in Costa Maya.

    I became a summer stray, roaming the island
    with wild dogs and curious children, an oddity
    spotted by waving fishermen on teal mornings
    before the next boat sailing to Guardalavaca
    finally came. I remember Cuba without you,
    a new sundress with cash from your wallet
    before I kissed the oiled black leather
    and threw that last piece of you away.

    Adios, amor, gracias por la nueva ropa y el paseo libre...
    lastima que no sabía nadar.




    Submitted on 2009-08-28 14:22:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this makes me ache so much. the images you conjure, so bittersweet - yet, by not tasting those memories, how can life ever be complete?

    beautiful, beautiful piece.
    | Posted on 2009-09-04 00:00:00 | by meoww | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh, apart from being impertinent (below), I want to tell you that I like your free verse a lot, a lot. I just go by how it sounds, not by what it means; and this verse sounds so good, I think you must be good at it.
    | Posted on 2009-08-30 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      I theenk you needing a new woman, my friend?
    | Posted on 2009-08-30 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]


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