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    dots Submission Name: Little Rage...............dots
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    Author: totojane03
    ASL Info:    25- colorado springs
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 151/77/35
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 347
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       Childish people...Don't bother me!


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    dotsLittle Rage...............dots
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    When you smile at those who try to bring you down,
    Who try to hurt you an make you frown,
    Who let they're words fill with, Anger,maddness,biterness and rage,

    Realize they're traped inside walls they have built, Burning with whats left of they're shame filled heart,
    They're mind is gone crazy trying to shift the blame,

    Jelouse,bittness, anger and rage is all that they have to Live for Inside they're little brain,
    Don't worrie when they wish you to rot,
    They're the ones Twisted in knots,

    Just ignore there big bad words,
    They're little brain soon enough,
    They will drive themself insain,
    While playing they're heartless games.......







    Submitted on 2009-08-28 17:24:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hi, a little better.
    | Posted on 2009-08-30 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi, a little edit, ok

    Smile when you come across
    those who try to bring you down,
    try to hurt you and make you frown,
    don't listen to their words full of anger,
    bitterness and rage, realize they’re locked
    by themselves in their own inside out cage.

    They are trapped with what’s left of their heart,
    burning in shame they're lost there mind pointing
    at people with there fingers not accepting the blame.
    Jalousie and anger their rage is all that they have left
    in there thoughts, don't worry when they wish you bad.
    They are the ones tied in knots, just ignore there words,
    in their little brains try escape reality playing their games.
    | Posted on 2009-08-29 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]


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