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    dots Submission Name: Where I Leave My Heartdots
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    Author: jezracrow
    ASL Info:    90+/F/Witness Relocation
    Elite Ratio:    6.52 - 10/6/4
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsWhere I Leave My Heartdots
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    In the beautiful regrets I carry there are shells
    and sea spray and sunlight, as well as dark evenings
    stretching full lengths of the Malecon, my seawall path
    sparse and unrehearsed. Taxis come and go,
    stop and start, while people chatter native tongues,
    blending scotch and Cohibas in the starlight evenings
    with coffee and papelillos in blue morning sun.

    I fall in love with everything here,
    every time I come.




    Submitted on 2009-08-29 11:20:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Is it Mexico? Another country, one with some of my beautiful regrets, this poem made me think about such places ... I am so old that I have forgotten what sex I was, but it made me feel like falling in love again. That is a fine little verse.

    I live in one of them places now ... the thoughts proceed ... I'm talking to people who think they live somewhere ordinary whence one needs to go away on vacation ... if they only knew ...
    | Posted on 2009-08-30 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very descriptive and makes me long for a place i too wish to leave my heart and return time and time again. This piece made me happy and nostalgic. I like the style and the flow as well as the imagery. Interesting piece yet fulfilling to an extent. Kind of makes me feel like i was there and know exactly what you speak of. An enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2009-08-30 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]
      i have a place just like this to which i am returning in 3 weeks. i left there 3 years ago and never thought i would ever find the capacity to return so every time i allow myself to think about the fact that i am returning tears well up and my skin prickles.

    this is a beautiful piece and i am glad you have somewhere to leave your heart too
    | Posted on 2009-08-29 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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