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    dots Submission Name: Angles In The Rain......dots
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    Author: totojane03
    ASL Info:    25- colorado springs
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 151/77/35
    Words: 226
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsAngles In The Rain......dots
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    Yesterday when it started to thunder,
    I was stuck in wonder watching the rain,
    It came down so hard and fast,
    Bringing Old joyfull memories back,
    I thought about when I was a Little girl,
    Unware of the troubles, cares of the world,
    I thought about the day I'd met an old man,
    Who was wise taught me things,
    That I did'nt always completly understand,
    We'd go for walks, hang out in coffee shops,
    He was a great old freind,
    As I smiled, I remembered the story he,
    Told me about angels,
    How they watch you always,
    Even when you are bad,
    Or make your freinds or mother mad,
    He said sometimes they cry,
    And I remember as a little girl,
    I had to ask why,
    He never really told me,He'd just say nevermind that part,
    When your older you will understand why,
    On our walks through out the day,
    I had always found at least one dirty penny in middle of the sidewalk just on our way,
    It's like he had planned our walk that way,
    Then He would tell me about yesterday and how Angles were out here playing in the rain,
    Saying they were just thinking about you Miss Young Jane,
    I'd always smiled,and ever since then,
    I remember this story when I find a little penny or after it rains.




    Submitted on 2009-08-29 13:40:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      hi, and thanks for the gentle rain tale.
    | Posted on 2009-08-30 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      This was nice, it was pretty good.
    you misspelled a few things though, Angles/Angels.
    Other than the few misspellings, it wasn't bad.
    I liked it.









    Will E.
    | Posted on 2009-08-29 00:00:00 | by Rhythmal | [ Reply to This ]


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