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Submission Name: Early dots

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Author:	expiring_touch
ASL Info:	26/f/Hamburg
Elite Ratio:	4.04 - 136/243/154
Words:	59

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
Total Views:	612
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	458

Description:
the second of the trilogy , I think,

Early

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My hair is tangled with the mountain smell,
Skies’ breath, upon my face
Retires, is caught with dizzy fingers,
Composed.

What thoughts, like rivers, run,
Until erased, in countless pirouettes
Through silent stratospheres?

The question posed is pointedly unanswered,
Established schemes are triply shaded -
First by the leaf, then window, and my own
Soporific hand.

Submitted on 2009-08-29 16:00:44 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I see early in my own life only if I
have stayed up all night to do it.
This happens if I spend a night fishing.
Spend all night online writing.
My job forces me to do it.
I get lost while running naked through
the swamp.

I am quite familiar with late afternoon.
None of this helps me empathize with
early as it relates to this poem.

However your words and imagery let me
imagine that I am there with you.

Retires, is caught with dizzy fingers
composed? This sounds like a death
allegory. Maybe lack of sleep has me
delusional but this entire poem reads like
an allegory of life.

Time to move on I have more of your
candy to devour.

| Posted on 2011-01-01 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

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