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    dots Submission Name: ROAD TO NOWHEREdots
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    Author: obaid
    ASL Info:    21/M/Gauntlet
    Elite Ratio:    4.52 - 148/93/34
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       writing something a long while later...i know i have gotten rusty!


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    dotsROAD TO NOWHEREdots
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    Sorry there's no map that comes with this body
    No map to where it hurts the most.
    But you could actually take a look
    Into it, into the ever-open book.

    The road lined inside the veins
    Not straight just go in circles.
    With one face in the center.
    A face to hold your gaze in its beauty you shall wonder!

    You walk forward you search for the cause of the pain
    Knowing it shall be in the heart that's where you head
    But its a room of only mirrors that mirrors the face
    The only face to ever be beating at an even pace.

    Where is the pain you wonder? What's causing it?
    You swim your way through the blood
    The pinnacle you have reached to find only hollows
    Hollows where the trace of intelligence should have been.

    This body goes through numbness and pain...again...again...again...




    Submitted on 2009-08-30 07:22:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was an awesome piece. I loved how you used a map for inspiration. That's original and a great way to explain your pain.
    | Posted on 2009-08-30 00:00:00 | by Jessa | [ Reply to This ]


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