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    dots Submission Name: Rip the bandage offdots

    Author: dismal_s child
    ASL Info:    19/F/On A Carousel
    Elite Ratio:    3.24 - 451/419/172
    Words: 208
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Depressed
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       Don't tell me "oh this should be under jurnal" If you don't like it as just a "my thoughts" kind of peice then don't comment, assholes.

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    dotsRip the bandage offdots

    I saw the world so completely different, in ways I can't show you, or make you understand. And it's a scary world, I don't want anything to do with it. Not half of the time. I just want it to all make sense again.

    When I was young, I had this notion that one day I'd find the guy to take me away from the hell I lived. I never knew I'd miss my hell. I never thought that I could. And what's worse is this empty silence, words distorted like as if I was under water, "aaarree yooou okaaaay?" No, I'm not and I don't know when I will be again. When the sun streamed in this morning I was so sure, that things would get better. And all would be right, You'd have the same smile that I fell in love with, and those worry lines would leave you pretty face. But, as I shook your shoulder, traced your forehead, and kissed you awake, You looked like you could kill me, and rolled over into sleep.

    So I scream and scream,
    then let my echos fade away.
    I am waiting for you to wake up.
    But I'm scared...I might have a long wait.

    Submitted on 2009-08-30 14:54:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      interesting writing here...
    Not sure I could understand the meaning it portrays. Probley because its just me and I am tierd I don't know.


    | Posted on 2009-08-31 00:00:00 | by totojane03 | [ Reply to This ]

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