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Untitled Poetry

Author: Kio
ASL Info:    1?/male/Ireland
Elite Ratio:    3.04 - 8 /27 /25
Words: 52
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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This is one of poor attempts at poetry.

Untitled Poetry

I curl in the corner,
Destroyed by your words,
I cower and shiver,
Afraid of the future.

I wonder why,
The question plaguing my mind,
I cry and shed tears
That have long been dried up.

I give up and stop moving,
Cursing my luck but never cursing others.

Submitted on 2009-08-31 05:33:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  You said you can't write poetry, I liked it. I hope it wasn't my words that made you do that, I don't want to hurt you. I don't want you to be hurt, ever.
| Posted on 2009-08-31 00:00:00 | by smexybabe0101 | [ Reply to This ]

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