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    dots Submission Name: Not that Far Awaydots
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    Author: Cayman
    ASL Info:    31
    Elite Ratio:    2.77 - 182/168/72
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 553
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 825



    Description:
       Thought you were in love but only had a clue once you knew....


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    dotsNot that Far Awaydots
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    How can one think they have a cookie when all they had was a crumb.
    Swimming in an endless ocean then realizing it was a pool of sorry.
    Hoping that tomorrow brought excitement but filled with pretentious apprehension.

    A kiss on the lips felt like a kiss on the cheek.
    Thoughts of love was cool, it was nice but didnít suffice.
    Tasks felt daily, events not eventful.

    Then oneís soul conjures up a Love brew.
    Never knew how this could ensue but me and you.
    A faint passion erupts into an emotional eclipse in a moments time.



    Our time is now and the chariot awaits.

    Hearts conjoined like twins, summer begins and winter ends.

    Today is a good day because itís one less day apart.




    Submitted on 2009-08-31 10:25:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Great writing. You are very talented.











    danica
    | Posted on 2009-09-02 00:00:00 | by larkspur | [ Reply to This ]
      very great writing it must of taken alot of work. I like the title and the flow of the lyrics. Everything seems purfect to me and if any one trys to tell you other wise they must just be jelouse of a great talented writer.

    Keep up the great work!

    totojane
    | Posted on 2009-08-31 00:00:00 | by totojane03 | [ Reply to This ]


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