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    dots Submission Name: Hot Passiondots
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    Author: totojane03
    ASL Info:    25- colorado springs
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 151/77/35
    Words: 221
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Love
    Total Views: 592
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    Description:
       my love for my husband...


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    dotsHot Passiondots
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    I remember yesterday longing for your touch,
    As I thought of you I began,
    To miss you so much,
    As I closed my eyes,
    I imagined it was just us,
    As I felt your soft touch all over my body,
    I began to sweat,
    Imagining things we hadn't tried yet,
    But in this fantisy it was just you and me,
    Making hot passionate love,
    As soon as I'd forgotten that this,
    Was just a daydream,
    I heard the phone ring,

    And you told me you were on your way home.
    I waited by the door for you,
    As soon as you walked in,
    I started to undress you and kiss you deeply,
    Crying for you to make love to me,
    You had missed me and longed for me too,
    The whole day untill now you'd said you were blue.

    As we lay in the bed with,
    Our body's deeply embraced,
    And our heart beats in a race,
    Feeling so many emotions,
    none that we could controll,
    As we switched places,
    With me on the top,
    I slowly let my hips rock,
    Softly making love to you,
    Telling you how much ,
    I loved and miss you,
    And its hard being without you,
    Oh,My husband you know this is true,
    forever and always,
    It will be just me and you.......




    Submitted on 2009-08-31 17:52:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      That was really nice. Dang I had all these images in my head as I was reading it. Nice thought provoking piece.
    | Posted on 2009-09-03 00:00:00 | by Cayman | [ Reply to This ]
      very nice
    | Posted on 2009-09-02 00:00:00 | by kristian | [ Reply to This ]
      Very sensual! Lucky hubby!! Making love is like baking a cake; it gets sweeter and better the closer it gets to being done!!!

    Nice work!
    | Posted on 2009-09-01 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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