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    dots Submission Name: Storms Of Lifedots
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    Author: totojane03
    ASL Info:    25- colorado springs
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 151/77/35
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsStorms Of Lifedots
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    Yesterday the lightning lite up the dark,
    Covered sky, scaring away the birds,
    As the thunder drove by,
    The clouds rushed in,
    Without time for Goodbyes,
    The Tear drops began to fly,
    Singing A hard melody that ryhmed,
    With the cold bitter rain,
    Sounding like a harsh beating hiting the, ground as it made deeper puddles,
    All surounding you,
    Making you wonder why you were shaking,
    As you felt your heart breaking,
    For mistaking the truth,
    But the blame this time was all on you,
    The wind then struck you hard,
    Blowing you around like a piece of cardboard,
    Realizing all you did was focus on you.
    What about those who said they loved you?
    The twisted cloud then swallowed you whole,
    Facing the fact you were'nt in controll,
    You had time before this mess had happened,
    To change your wicked ways,
    Or doom will soon be your fate,
    From troubles you are not willing to change,
    They will not just swallow you whole,
    But will gain all the controll......




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