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    dots Submission Name: Always Had Medots

    Author: Cayman
    ASL Info:    31
    Elite Ratio:    2.77 - 182/168/72
    Words: 157
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 563
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 951


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    dotsAlways Had Medots

    Photo centric cohesiveness entangles me.
    Your mind had me that faithful day of playful introduction.
    I reacted with the most masculine tendencies possible.
    But you saw right through my boy block.
    It was a shock to see what can and will be done by someone like yourself.

    You had me the day you said hello.
    My bellow fell slow with a mellow blow.
    Only to find true love in a momentís time.
    No reason or rhyme, only loveís doctrined shrine.
    You are mine till the end of time, I knew from that initial touch of painted lips.
    Love has positioned my disposition and Iím wishing for further emotional transitions.

    You didnít know it, but you had me at first glance.
    Our eyes took a chance, hoping for blissful romance.
    Eyes like X-manned beams, stream my inner being.
    You had me since the day I was born and I was destined to meet you.

    Submitted on 2009-08-31 22:57:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      well sorry but ithink this is forcd together words to make them ryme rather then flowing poetry
    | Posted on 2009-09-02 00:00:00 | by kristian | [ Reply to This ]
      Absolutely beautiful!

    | Posted on 2009-09-02 00:00:00 | by larkspur | [ Reply to This ]
      This is nice.
    Love at first sight is a beautiful thing.

    Will E.
    | Posted on 2009-09-01 00:00:00 | by Rhythmal | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow you really are a very good writer with a beutiful talent and gift.
    I enjoyed this poem it was very nice and had a great flow.

    Great job!

    | Posted on 2009-09-01 00:00:00 | by totojane03 | [ Reply to This ]
      You catch a lot of emotion especially the way you start the two last paragraphs.

    You tell the story so it catches the reader... and the meaning in it is clear.
    I think the lenght of the piece fitts just perfect.

    Very good work.

    - Kwanying -
    | Posted on 2009-09-01 00:00:00 | by Kwanying | [ Reply to This ]

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