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    dots Submission Name: When Change Comesdots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsWhen Change Comesdots
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    When Change Comes

    The stars will fall tonight
    And you'll show no alarm
    You'll sit in your precious life
    Won't even see the storm

    Muted awes and screams alike
    Of said deadly beauty's come
    Like the ticking of an old clock
    Faded sounds from so long

    So you will see nothing new
    When the spectacle arrives
    Tunnel vision blotting your view
    While the entire world dies

    And some may take shelter
    And others will run
    But you will sit there blindly
    Missing all of the fun

    And at your last moment
    You will wonder why
    You ignored all that resided
    In the back of your mind

    The whispers, the flashes
    Smoke and fire at flight
    The light in the sky
    When the stars fall tonight




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