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    dots Submission Name: Our own "Hey there Delilah"dots
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    Author: Dreamer5009
    ASL Info:    16, Male, USA
    Elite Ratio:    5.02 - 73/53/28
    Words: 216
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 761
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1357



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    dotsOur own "Hey there Delilah"dots
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    Hey there Rachi
    we'll be sure to go the distance
    while we're together, we won't be lonely
    thanks to you
    I swear it's true

    Oh it's what you do to me
    I hope, apart, we'll never be
    Oh how I wish to see
    your faced filled with glee

    Hey there Rachi
    There's so much left unsaid
    If I tried to say it all
    We'd both be dead
    and then we'd never wed

    Oh it's what you do to me
    Our loves conjoins into a sea
    We unlock our hearts with our key
    That's how we know it's meant to be

    A thousand miles seems pretty far,
    at least we now know where we are
    Our friends will all make fun of us
    and we'll just walk on by because
    Our love grows deeper by the day
    Rachi I can promise you
    that when the year springs anew
    the universe will never ever be the same
    and you're to blame

    Hey there Rachi
    you be good and don't you miss me
    2 more weeks and you'll be back home
    and together we will roam
    Always and forever, just with you
    We can do whatever we want to
    hey there Rachi here's to you
    my love's for you




    Submitted on 2009-09-02 08:52:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      oh, how sweet.

    be gentle with my Princess's heart, please, she's the most Precious little girl in the world to me.

    (my other daughter is grown now, so i can say that!)
    | Posted on 2009-09-10 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]
      aw.
    thanks mi amor.
    "if only my heart wasn't bursting with pride.
    together we will stay even if my heart isn't inside."

    i love you(in other words)
    tu es mi amor.
    mi amor de mi corazon.
    mi amor de mi vida.

    my darling.
    | Posted on 2009-09-04 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]


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