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    dots Submission Name: The Storm of Youdots

    Author: Darkest Flaw
    ASL Info:    21/M/WA
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 208/287/108
    Words: 171
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 762
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1057

       Just wrote this today. been out of touch lately.

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    dotsThe Storm of Youdots

    As the tide pulses my hands tremble
    while the waves crash against your feet
    an angel of the Pacific Shoreline
    pacing with the true radiance of life.
    The sunset is perfect turning your figure to silhouette
    and letting the stars peek to catch a glimpse -
    of the beauty that rests beside the sea.

    My heart beats faster and harder
    with every step you take towards me
    as the vibrant storm of you drags me farther
    from the human that I used to be.

    No wind to catch my tattered sail
    when I lean against the breeze
    just all the racing thoughts of us
    then, now, - - tomorrow
    and maybe forever if you'll let me love you -
    until I'm dead and gone away
    to become your angel of the sea.

    My heart beats slower and softer
    with every breath you take from me
    as the lull of your storm makes it harder
    for me to finally fade into the breeze.

    ~James Boyer~

    Submitted on 2009-09-02 13:06:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      dude this is art @ its finest.. art to me is when someone can feel the emotion coming out of the peice.. and thats what happend here i can feel every word.. good job
    | Posted on 2009-09-02 00:00:00 | by kristian | [ Reply to This ]
      That is undoubtedly beautiful. Your wording creates such a soothing scenery, it is definately a love poem, I won't question that. Well done.
    | Posted on 2009-09-02 00:00:00 | by PanKavani | [ Reply to This ]
      Now that's a love poem!
    What else can I say but WOW!
    I have a girlfriend and everything
    and I have never write her anything
    like this.

    Bobby K
    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2009-09-02 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]

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