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The Storm of You

Author: Darkest Flaw
ASL Info:    21/M/WA
Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 208 /287 /108
Words: 171
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Average Vote:    5.0000
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Just wrote this today. been out of touch lately.

The Storm of You

As the tide pulses my hands tremble
while the waves crash against your feet
an angel of the Pacific Shoreline
pacing with the true radiance of life.
The sunset is perfect turning your figure to silhouette
and letting the stars peek to catch a glimpse -
of the beauty that rests beside the sea.

My heart beats faster and harder
with every step you take towards me
as the vibrant storm of you drags me farther
from the human that I used to be.

No wind to catch my tattered sail
when I lean against the breeze
just all the racing thoughts of us
then, now, - - tomorrow
and maybe forever if you'll let me love you -
until I'm dead and gone away
to become your angel of the sea.

My heart beats slower and softer
with every breath you take from me
as the lull of your storm makes it harder
for me to finally fade into the breeze.

~James Boyer~

Submitted on 2009-09-02 13:06:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  dude this is art @ its finest.. art to me is when someone can feel the emotion coming out of the peice.. and thats what happend here i can feel every word.. good job
| Posted on 2009-09-02 00:00:00 | by kristian | [ Reply to This ]
  That is undoubtedly beautiful. Your wording creates such a soothing scenery, it is definately a love poem, I won't question that. Well done.
| Posted on 2009-09-02 00:00:00 | by PanKavani | [ Reply to This ]
  Now that's a love poem!
What else can I say but WOW!
I have a girlfriend and everything
and I have never write her anything
like this.

Bobby K
The Poor Man's Poet.
| Posted on 2009-09-02 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]

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