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    dots Submission Name: Reveriedots

    Author: NoMartyr
    ASL Info:    18/M/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    2.51 - 33/97/91
    Words: 165
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 639
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       Fuck it, day dream

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    I'm lost in reverie
    That's where you'll find me
    So don't sound your reveille
    It don't concern me

    Rapturous vibrations enjoy evocations
    of lengthy durations in daydream vacations
    In my head
    Our eyes still meet to pretend I'm inside
    But my blank stare defeats me it says that I am occupied

    So here we are...

    Flyin' against the wind
    Against our whim
    We sell our souls for a dime
    And when the light in your eyes finally dies
    Ya wake up and do it again

    I can never sleep tight
    My thoughts racing
    Daydreams turn into sleepless nights
    Mantra stirring endlessly
    I commit to pen lest I never sleep again
    You can buy Tylenol 3's in Canada
    You can buy Tylenol 3's in Canada
    You can buy Tylenol 3's in Canada
    And that's where you ought to live

    When I used to sleep, I'd be dreaming
    Now I don't
    When I used to think I had feelings
    When I'm numb

    Submitted on 2009-09-02 13:41:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I had to read it twice to sort of try and understand it. At first I thought it was about a day dream as you stated, but then you stated that it requires payment $8.25) so then I thought maybe movie or something like that, where you can go in and be pulled away from reality and thoughts. Another part that confused me were these lines:

    Rapturous vibrations enjoy evocations
    of lengthy durations in daydream vacations

    I am still unsure of what they mean.

    As a whole I liked it, and I liked the way you ended it to.
    | Posted on 2009-09-03 00:00:00 | by TheStillSilence | [ Reply to This ]

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