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    dots Submission Name: Under My Skindots
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    Author: mojymo
    Elite Ratio:    6.43 - 50/59/41
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsUnder My Skindots
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    I'm basking in the blood beneath my skin,
    stretching my vertebrae with a happy sigh.
    It's safe inside this flesh.
    Snuggle against the veins
    and hold them tight,
    making the nerves twitch.
    They complain about my waking them.

    The tighter I squeeze the less blood that
    circulates to my head.
    The dizziness is the addiction.

    I'm pressuring you to try it.
    Join me.
    It's easy.
    It's safe.

    Cuddle with me against this artery here,
    but be careful not to betray me and stab it.
    I'm not in the mood to watch the crimson life
    gluck, gluck, gluck
    from the wound.

    My nerves are aching,
    but it's the endurance that's so fulfilling.
    My veins are screaming about this murder,
    but the sound makes me hug them tighter.

    End: 12:53 am
    Wed. Aug. 26, 09




    Submitted on 2009-09-02 20:37:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very unique piece this, i feel its very original indeed, the imagery is superb and i totall y enjoyed the flow. I am wondering what inspired you to write this as it has a kind of warm maniacal feel to it. Not everyday you get to read something like youve written here and i completely enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing, and offering a view into your insanity! Haha!
    | Posted on 2009-09-03 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]


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