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    dots Submission Name: Lovedots
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    Author: Clayman
    ASL Info:    28 - getting late
    Elite Ratio:    6.34 - 609/327/167
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/What is
    Total Views: 550
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    Bytes: 651



    Description:
       What is love really?


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    dotsLovedots
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    Love is a feeling
    We all want to feel..
    Experiencing it
    Seems unreal..
    Love needs no big introduction..
    We all should know -
    It can easily lead to great destruction..

    Love is a feeling of great pleasure
    To which no other Feeling can measure..
    Love makes you feel light as a feather..
    Love is..growing old together..

    Playing around with love is great danger
    One false move
    And your partner's a stranger..

    As you can see love is very unpredictable
    But love is also
    Pleasantly undescribable..

    -Svw




    Submitted on 2009-09-03 04:39:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Here is where I can see your real talent start to flow. I read your poem, Shiny Redmeption, first, and now I can see I was right about you having potential that is best displayed when toned down. You communicate your thought easily and fluently, and although the theme is somewhat cliché, and the flow a little choppy in places, it was altogether an enjoyable read. I can see your play of words, and how you changed the flow throughout. A good exercise. Keep at it, and the flow will improve, or simply leave it as it is; the way it came out originally may best convey the sincerity of feeling at the time you wrote it.
    | Posted on 2009-09-03 00:00:00 | by Soul-Hugger | [ Reply to This ]


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