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    dots Submission Name: We live in love, alwaysdots

    Author: PrettyHeart
    ASL Info:    39
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 62/55/53
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsWe live in love, alwaysdots

    Love is forever unkind
    Thoughts and feelings
    Always awake in my head
    You and I were comfortable
    Living the day, waiting
    Wishing your voice I could hear
    Dreaming your arms around
    My head fills of memories
    Time we shared, moments
    Laughing at us living our life
    The moments has escaped
    Gone from us, alive in me
    We live in love, always

    Submitted on 2009-09-03 07:30:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the concept of this; even when we're not in love, we still think about and relive those moments in which we are- we can't really ever escape it. Although love isn't something we even want to escape. A few grammatical issues here and there, but it read well. And I liked how you went in full circle (ended with the same idea you started with); it's one of my fave techniques =]
    | Posted on 2009-09-03 00:00:00 | by TheStillSilence | [ Reply to This ]

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