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    dots Submission Name: Love affairdots
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    Author: isis_lenore
    Elite Ratio:    3.78 - 459/207/102
    Words: 14
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       Haiku attempt.


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    dotsLove affairdots
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    The beauty of spring
    is only a passing fling,
    but the birds still sing.




    Submitted on 2009-09-03 08:12:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Much meaning in this delightful Haiku! Nice work!
    | Posted on 2009-11-26 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Whether or not it's a perfect haiku, I like it because it says: "Live for the moment". Haiku, like some other English traditional forms imported from other languages, can be at their most interesting and effective when varied a bit! One variation here is the triple rhyme ... people seem to agree thast the sonance should be hidden. But for me, that rhyming makes the poem refer more strongly to its meaning,whichI taketo bea metaphor connecting Spring with Love..

    Er well, I can't help it, I keep on studying haiku and getting more and more puzzled about how correct it needs to be, just like sonnets, which also can be lovely just because one wrote them all wrong! So I can't say much sense about it, except that it's successful with me.

    Thanks for the wonderful comment on Merlin! I think the other poems of this series might turn out to be fairly delightful but quite obscure, too! They have a lot of allusion to legend, and nothing original; but you still need to have read the legends and remember them! Like those people who drive me crazy by talking in quotes from Rock, country/western or hip hop! Part of the language I guess.
    | Posted on 2009-09-06 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      A decent Haiku
    and it reads fairly nice too.
    That is essential


    Good poem






    Will E.
    | Posted on 2009-09-03 00:00:00 | by Rhythmal | [ Reply to This ]
      You hit the nail right on the head.
    short and sweet too.

    Bobby K
    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2009-09-03 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
      Short, to the point. Love IT!
    | Posted on 2009-09-03 00:00:00 | by jayisademon | [ Reply to This ]


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